it only took 6 months, but here it is! http://soundcloud.com/pukeonthestreet/s ... downs-part please listen all the way through!

Will check this out in a bit. Better sounds like Kid Dynamite jkjkjk

Interesting...very experimental. I assume you'd appreciate some feedback, so here's my opinion. Feel free to discard it!

"Anxious, inexperienced writers obey rules. Rebellious, unschooled writers break rules. Artists master the form." -Robert McKee

I see a lot of rule breaking in your music here, specifically in recording technique. I recommend you know each rule you are breaking and know why you are breaking it, ie. What effect you are trying to produce in a listener.

*I could rarely hear any bass (in a few songs I'm sure you don't even have one), which along with drums is basically the heart or core or trunk of every piece of music. Typically punk bands will lose their guitarists rather than a bass. I couldn't hear your drums either. One recording/mix engineer once told me that if you turn your mix almost all the way down you should always just hear the vocals and the snare drum. Another told me that if I want to know how my recordings should sound I should listen to live music because recording technology has always tried to capture that live sound as it is heard by the audience (ie not as is captured by crappy camcorder mics.)

*Instruments pan wildly from one side to the other which doesn't make me feel like the music is actually happening in a real space (which is what you should be going for in recording.) In some sections there are so many guitar parts wandering from one side to the other that things tend to get very muddy. When recording you should be trying to explore a space, or a room. A musician's canvas is the room he is playing in, fill it with sound! This is why the room you record in and the reverb you add is so vital to creating the musical experience. The mind can infer the size and shape of the room based on the reverberations that fill it. That's what our auditory system is for whenever you're not listening to music too, you know?

So if you are getting the effect you want, cool. If you know exactly why you broke the rules in each instance, cool. If you never thought about it from the perspective I've just presented then you might want to change things next time you sit down to record. I hope you consider this constructive critism, there's plenty of things to like about your pieces. I'm not trying to bash on you! I know from experience how much hard work getting anything recorded can be.

I appreciate the advice, I purposely did a ton of improv, and weird recording techniques, and I need to get it mastered for sure as the levels sounded good on the computer but sound really weird like a loud sort of quiet in my car, I broke so many rules it's not funny, most tracks the drums were done last for example, I just wanted to make something that was sloppy and real instead of all those perfect albums out there and I wanted to not put too much pressure on myself as I have stacks and stacks of lyrics to make into songs, but thanks hope you enjoyed it more than you offered advice